Murder Mystery

Hello Readers!

This piece of writing is actually a part-two of a post on a fellow blogger’s blog. She asked people to post their version of part two in the comments so did. I end up being really proud of the piece so I wanted to post it. If you want to check out part one it is called Mysterious Murder?!

“Go faster!” Summer screamed to Katy who was driving the van. Brittney was in the back seat, no seat belt, empty looking, in shock of what had just happened…..

After the gunshot at 1:00 pm they looked around trying to see where the sound came from. When Brittney met the eyes of the killer, she looked at the ground. There lay the waiter that had just served them their lunch. He was on the ground, still, pale, eyes wide open but lifeless.

Brittney looked back to the killer. She starred straight into his grey eyes. Katy and Summer looked behind them to see what Brittney was looking at and they saw him as well. Katy  “Run.”

Katy and Summer immediately got up and bolted towards the parking lot. Brittney was frozen, still starring into the man’s cold eyes. Summer lunged for Brittney’s arm. She tugged it hard but she didn’t budge. Then, adrenaline rushing through Summer, picked Brittney up as best as she could and headed off as fast as she could to follow Katy.

Katy looked behind her to see that the killer nor the body was there any more. But she was scared to stop, so she kept going. They got to the van, only to figure out it was locked. Summer picked up a rock and smashed it through the window. The vehicle was so old that the alarm was broken so it was still silent through out the parking lot.

Summer grabbed Brittney from the ground and tossed her in the back seat. She and Katy climbed into the front and started to drive.

Katy started to drive as fast was she could. Forgot the speed limit existed. Summer looked behind Katy. And saw Brittney sitting there. “Brittney?” Softly trying to get her attention. Nothing. “Brittney.” She said louder at more serious, but inside with concern. Still nothing. “Brittney! Are hurt? What is happening right now?” She said even louder with concern and slight frustration.

“The killer, it was my brother.”

7 years ago, when Brittney was 10, her brother was killed in a freak accident. Her older brother Sam who was 19, was on a commercial fishing boat and fell over board. His best friend was their and tried to pull him back on board couldn’t manage. He had drowned.



2 Comments on Murder Mystery

  1. Jayden
    December 16, 2017 at 9:36 pm (3 months ago)

    Hi Olivia. I think it is so cool how detailed and descriptive your writing is, it’s honestly much better than mine. Thank you so much for continuing my story! The twist at the end really pulled the sory together. I would love for you to continue writing stories because your iagenation is incredible!
    Bye and have a cake-filled day 😀

    • Olivia
      December 18, 2017 at 5:51 pm (3 months ago)

      Hey Jayden,
      Thanks so much! I really enjoyed your story and thought it was a great idea to have people continue writing it. That is a super creative idea that I maybe borrow sometime. Thanks so so so much, it means a lot. I am always trying to make my writing more engaging and more interesting. Did anyone else write a part 2? If so please tell me because i would love to read the different takes on the story.
      Have a great day!


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